Had this real surreal experience on the way to work the other morning. It was early, around 0430, and I was stopped by a train leaving a steel mill. It had many empty cars. The morning was slightly hazy, warm. The trains went by, thumping the pavement, with a rhythm that danced with the warning lights. The train was so dark, and black, but the lights around would break through each car. Very beautiful and peaceful. First time I didn’t mind getting caught by a train….
Trying to work this into poem…
Mentally Impaled 
i’d call it “Rail Lights”
((((Wulfgar))))
Peace Bro.
Oh, I like that my friend. I’m having such a hard time putting that scene into words. When I write poetry, it’s very lucid, haiku-ish, on the spot spontaneous spontaneity. It is so difficult to capture a feeling like that….some times I wish I had a camera. Hey, for sh!ts and giggles, wanna work this one out, right here, on the www, via Mentally Impaled? Do ya? Huh? Do ya?
((((arkay))))
i has some thots on that, will think about it some more, and maybe post some word thoughts in the next few days or so.
mite lean more towards the giggles side of things, iffn you don’t mind tho 😉
(i have had some fleeting wordings that i think might contribute to what you wish to convey)
ciao 4now
[…] maybe not ‘soon’. Having as much trouble as Wulfgar getting words on the page to describe just what it is i feel. […]
Try this…
(woke up with the gist of it in my head this morning – yours to do with as you will)
Rail Lights
Starlit morn
Thump-thump, Thump-thump
Slowing down
Thump-thump, Thump-thump
Fully stop
Thump-thump, Thump-thump
Walls of steel
There…not, There…not
Narrow gap
There-not, There-not
Warning red
There-not, There-not
Notice now
light-dark, light-dark
Rhythm soothes
light-dark, light-dark
Thought adrift
light-dark, light-dark
Peace settles
(edit above please… supposed to be thoughts adrift. ty)
How bout this;
Rail Lights
Pre-dawn night
Thump-thump, Thump-thump
Slowing down, my path blocked
Thump_Thump, Thump_Thump
Fully stop, my movement and thoughts
Thump_Thump, Thump_Thump
Walls of steel, wheeled, rolling
There_not, There_not
Narrow gap
There_not, There_not
Warning red
Hypnotic Flashes
Here now, Awake
light_dark, Thump_ Thump, light_dark, Thump_Thump
Rhythm soothes
Thump_Thump, Thump_Thump
Thoughts align
Thump_Thump, Thump_Thump
Peace settles